Essay e-Comments - Classroom 2.02024-03-29T12:32:23Zhttps://www.classroom20.com/forum/topics/essay-ecomments?feed=yes&xn_auth=noJohn,
No plans on the e-com…tag:www.classroom20.com,2011-06-04:649749:Comment:6462832011-06-04T21:03:05.076ZMark Penningtonhttps://www.classroom20.com/profile/MarkPennington
<p>John,</p>
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<p>No plans on the e-comments yet for Macs, though I think my 47-page <a href="http://penningtonpublishing.com/writing.html" target="_blank">The Pennington Manual of Style</a> is worth a nickel on its own. As to the audio comments inserts, <a href="http://penningtonpublishing.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2011/01/How-to-Use-e.pdf" target="_blank">here's how</a>.</p>
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<p>Teachers have been asking me for some examples of the 438 comments. Here is a nice…</p>
<p>John,</p>
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<p>No plans on the e-comments yet for Macs, though I think my 47-page <a target="_blank" href="http://penningtonpublishing.com/writing.html">The Pennington Manual of Style</a> is worth a nickel on its own. As to the audio comments inserts, <a target="_blank" href="http://penningtonpublishing.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2011/01/How-to-Use-e.pdf">here's how</a>.</p>
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<p>Teachers have been asking me for some examples of the 438 comments. Here is a nice sampling:</p>
<p><strong>Introduction Paragraphs</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Thesis statement does not respond to writing prompt. </strong></span>Re-read the writing prompt and dissect according to the WHO (the audience and role of the writer), the WHAT (the context of the writing topic), the HOW (the resource text title and author), and the DO (the key writing direction word).</p>
<p><strong>Body Paragraphs: Argument, Analysis, Types of Evidence</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Add support evidence. </strong></span>More evidence is needed to adequately support the major detail. Add evidence in major detail or minor detail sentences such as <strong><span>F</span></strong>act, <strong><span>E</span></strong>xample, <strong><span>S</span></strong>tatistic, <strong><span>C</span></strong>omparison, Quote from an <strong><span>A</span></strong>uthority, <strong><span>L</span></strong>ogic, <strong><span>E</span></strong>xperience, or <strong><span>C</span></strong>ounter-Argument/<strong><span>R</span></strong>efutation. <strong>FE SCALE CR</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Red Herring Errors </strong></span>An unconnected reference distracts the reader from the argument. <strong>Example: </strong>Poverty is the most important problem; however, the world has always had poor people. Explanation: The second clause distracts the reader from the issue of poverty as the most important problem.</p>
<p><strong>Coherence, Word Choice, Sentence Variety, and Writing Style</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Revise: Too Many “to-be” Verbs </strong></span>Consider limiting use of <em>is, am, are, was, were, be, being, been </em>to one per paragraph. To replace “to be verbs” 1. Substitute a more active verb 2. Begin the sentence with another word from the sentence 3. Change one of the words in the sentence into a verb form.</p>
<p><strong>Citations</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>MLA Works Cited (Print Encyclopedia) </strong></span>Pennington, Mark. “Works Cited.” Encyclopedia of Writing. 1st ed. 1. El Dorado Hills, CA: Pennington Publishing, 2010. Print. <strong>In-Text Citation:</strong> (Pennington 212-213)</p>
<p><strong>Grammatical Forms</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Gerund Phrases </strong></span>A gerund phrase is an <em>____ing </em>verb, connected to related words, and is used as a noun. <strong>Example: </strong><em>Driving a car</em> has become a necessary skill these days.</p>
<p><strong>Sentence Problems</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Sentence Fragments </strong></span>A sentence fragment is only part of a complete sentence.<strong> </strong>To fix a sentence fragment, remove any subordinating conjunctions. <strong>Example: </strong>Although she found out where the boys were. Revision: She found out where the boys were.</p>
<p><strong>Mechanics</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>Commas with Introductory Word(s) </strong></span>Use commas after introductory words, phrases, or clauses. Drop the comma if the sentence is very short and there is no necessary pause.<strong> Examples: </strong>First, listen to me. First of all, listen to me. After you first sit up, listen to me. Then I went home.</p>
<p><strong>Spelling</strong></p>
<p><span><strong>The <em>i</em> before <em>e</em> Spelling Rule </strong></span>Usually spell <em>i</em> before <em>e</em> <em>(believe)</em>, but spell <em>e </em>before <em>i</em> after a <em>c</em> <em>(receive)</em>and when the letters are pronounced as a long /a/ sound <em>(neighbor)</em>. Exceptions to the <em>i</em> before <em>e</em>rule include the following: <em>neither</em>, <em>either</em>, <em>weird</em>, <em>forfeit</em>, <em>caffeine</em>, <em>height</em>, to name a few.</p>
<p> </p> Hi Mark,
This looks like a ve…tag:www.classroom20.com,2011-06-04:649749:Comment:6461802011-06-04T17:53:54.788ZJohn Blaberhttps://www.classroom20.com/profile/JohnBlaber
<p>Hi Mark,</p>
<p>This looks like a very interesting way to improve efficiency and depth of teacher feedback on draft essays. Two questions:</p>
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<li>You note this works on Windows. Any plans for a Mac version? I've got OS X 10.6.7, and am running Word for Mac 2011.</li>
<li>You also say teachers can insert audio files in the Comment bubbles within Word. Is there a link to a site that explains the process for doing this?</li>
</ol>
<p>Thanks in advance for your response, and I look forward…</p>
<p>Hi Mark,</p>
<p>This looks like a very interesting way to improve efficiency and depth of teacher feedback on draft essays. Two questions:</p>
<ol>
<li>You note this works on Windows. Any plans for a Mac version? I've got OS X 10.6.7, and am running Word for Mac 2011.</li>
<li>You also say teachers can insert audio files in the Comment bubbles within Word. Is there a link to a site that explains the process for doing this?</li>
</ol>
<p>Thanks in advance for your response, and I look forward to trying out this solution.</p>
<p>John Blaber</p>
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